This is the story that I had in my mind for many years but somehow never got to write it down. So here is my first story ever.
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As they say opposites attract, here is the story of two extremely opposite people, very much in love with each other and soon to be separated.
He was a complete an extrovert and liked sports where as she was an introvert and loved books. He hadn’t spend any silent moment ever in his life, where as she was an extremely soft spoken girl and quite. He was the kind without whom parties didn’t start and she mere laughed at the jokes cracked by him, but thoroughly supported in whatever he liked. He hated shopping where as she loved it. She thought from her heart and he from his head. She, a very sophisticated girl who wouldn’t tolerate a pinch of dirtiness nor did she like the room and the house to be disorganized, where as he was always responsible for making a mess out of the whole house. Dispite these differences and many more, the one thing common between the two is they loved each other a lot.
One day.
As he entered their room, she was sitting on the bed and he had already dined out, so sat down on the sofa to watch the t.v.
She: “I need to talk to you for a moment.”. “I am going to mom’s place tomorrow and I have emptied the house for you and her to live”.
Was surprised to hear her voice after 3 days. He just turned around and saw her face which was extremely pale with the dark circles but he noticed she still looked beautiful with those. Some how deep down inside him, he thought to call all this off and hug her and ask for forgive ness but he himself didn’t know what stopped him from doing so.
He : “Okay.”
She : “ Please give me the book that I presented you on our weeding day.”
She had presented him a book on their marriage day, fully aware that he hardly touches any books, she still gifted because she loved them and just because she loved books, he loved them too and as an exception he did read this one. The book was on marriage.
He : “ okay”
Next morning, she was ready to leave. The book was in her hands. As she reached the door she waited for him to come from behind and stop her. But he never stopped her from moving out.
She reached airport and while she paid for the taxi, she saw him coming running towards her. Her heart started to beat fast as he came nearer.
He: “Can I have this (looking at the book in her hand) please? You gave it to me, it is mine now.
Without saying a word she gave the book to him and he turned away, after a second, turning around again, with tears in his eyes.
He : “Can I have the one who gifted me this one? God gave her to me ,she is mine for ever.”
Friday, May 30, 2008
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22 comments:
Touchy...
for a first time story.. this is a very good write up...and i can say for sure, that this is an inspired work...
Looking forward to more.
by the way...? u have some comedy in mind..?! ;-)
wow really impressed to read this story,it somehow reminded me of the film salaam namaste i dont know why but it did.And you write so nicely i loved the way you have described both the characters in the story.
keep writing :)
tht was written very well..
i liked the way u d ended t..
@ the thinker
thanks ...
at present dont have ne comedy in mind, i guess it is very challenging to write a comedy !!
@ sourav
welcome !!!
thanks , but i too fail to undersand how " salaam namaste" probably because saif too realises preity's value in the end :)
@ matangi
thanks !!!
yeah thats a view from my home in kasauli, a hill station in HP. I beleive its THE Paradise on earth and worth visiting place...
yeah.. u must visit the place...soon u can find some more pics more on my blog..
aww... so cute :-)
I am blogrolling you :-)
Cheers!
very beautiful!!!!
very touchy....
and since this is ur first story, that makes it even exceptional....
Hi, the story is impressive. I like the way you ended it. Kudos!
However, the story would have been even more terrific if it had a great flow. Please write more so that you can master the art of story telling.
@ raaji
welcome here !!!!
thanks for the comment and for blogrolling me :)
@ a new philosopher....
thanks u liked it :)
@ rampantheart
welcome here!!!!
thanks a lot for your appreciation.
will try to improve as per your suggestions :)
That was so touching!Very well written for a first story.Keep it coming :)
@ sameera
thanks a lot...
oh maaaaannn...so cute a story to be told so simple....i jus luvd it..and ur keeping ur reputation up and up and up.....i fell for this story...amazing...!!! :)
@ rajiv m
thanks a lot for liking it so much :)
hmm....nicely written but don't mind but too corny i think
waiting for your next one :)
for first timer, it is quite a gud effort. and d end is very b'ful.
@ shex
u are free to give honest comments i appreciate that more.
will try to write next asap :)
@ viraj
thanks a lot for appreciation....
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