He: “good evening, can I come in?”
[At one go she was extremely shocked to see him as he came in her cabin suddenly and completely out of the blue, not to mention she could here her heart beat running so loudly that she feared that he would listen them too. Any way, she managed to say:]
She: “Good evening”. So you’ll be joining us from today. Can you tell me something about yourself?
[Something!!! she almost knew him inside out]
He: oh sure mam, my name is [name] and I am a [his qualification]. I like to do [his hobbies and stuff and blah blah blah]
[She was hardly listening anything to what he was speaking with so much interest, and she feared deep inside what if he noticed that something is wrong with her, but by God’s grace, the introduction went on well and he promised to meet her the next day]
[He came again the next day and then the next day and then the next day]
[Every time he entered the room, her heart started to beat very fast.]
She was in a dilemma of her life whether to tell the two person involved or not (one him and another who is dear friend of her). But how can she open her mouth and tell that she knew a lot about the person she meets daily (when he is absolutely unaware about her) because if she would tell, it would completely ruin the things and make the situations between them very awkward. Also what would she tell her (her friend) that he works in the same place. This would definitely make things wrong between her and her friend.
She was not directly related to him and certainly had no wish to relate to either, but it was a mere co-incidence that he landed in front of her, the reason of which only God could answer.
After going home one day, she thought,” some things are better left just as they are (in God’s hands) for even with the slightest interference, things could be ruined. There are things that are certainly not in our control and when we think, that why God makes such things happen, the only answer we get is, there is no answer to these questions.”
(This is my first try of a small fiction story)
About Me
- my inner world
- this is the most toughest thing to fill up, but i guess, this is what i am like: a very simple human being( but people around me dont believe just because i am well versed with the fashion and the prevailing trend sense) , a good listener,wish i was a good talker too,takes time to come close to people,hate liars,one who is mostly misunderstood of being arrogant, but once they know me, they think they were so very stupid to think so LOL !!!
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12 comments:
i refuse to believe its all fiction there has to be some hint of truth in it... there has to be
@ Shex
what makes you think it is not completely a fiction? :)
she has to have that courage to speak out...i think no answer, from god itself should tell her that it is her turn to act and not let god do everything for her...she has to manage to tell the truth, the inner feeling, let it come out..
it is better on her part to live freely after telling the truth, then rather live in fear and ruin everyone's life...
ps: all above blah blah was just a thought directly put in words..
so what you feel...???
is there more twist and turns in the story coming up??
@ idrish
thnks for the comment and making the suggestion that she shud speak it out and not let the things with in herself.
well, lets c , i might try adding twist and turn to the story. just wait and watch :)
"There are things that are certainly not in our control and when we think, that why God makes such things happen, the only answer we get is, there is no answer to these questions."
Probably there is one answer - Serendipity.
By the way, too good for a first attempt. But I somehow can't ignore what shex says. After all, whatever we write or think, are knowingly or unknowingly, influenced by things that happen in our life.
Anyways, all the best, for your next attempts. :)
@ abhinav
thanks for liking my first attempt at fiction and thnks for the wishes too:)
well "serendipity" would be the perfect word to describe the situation.
regarding the story's inspiration , it certainly is inspired from something, though not entirely :)
hey...good yaar....reminds me of an sms i got this morning.....just when we think we have all the answers of life, god changes the question paper!!!
ur blog is coming out nicely.....great...keep it up
@ new philosopher..
thanks for the appreciation !!!
well,i beleive you need a correct review.then i would suggest the avoiding of brackets first.More conversations can add more thickness.But still i appreciate your first attempt.
If you like surrealism or magical realism do visit MAN IN PAINTING.
http://keyboardsculpturer.blogspot.com
Fate, god or randomness whatever we call it do affect our lives in many ways. Our decisions are just half choices we make when fate present us with them.
I am surely looking forward to your next entry about the story.
@ man in painting
welcome here!!!
and thanks a lot for liking my effort.
will definitely work upon the suggestions made by you, thanks :)
@ sushant
yup exactly
"Fate, god or randomness whatever we call it do affect our lives in many ways"
will try and write a sequel to the story but cant promise when :)
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